I think your video is very cute and nicely animated. However, I think that it would be better to show it at the end of your presentation rather than the beginning. This way, it will be easier for the audience to follow and understand what is going on in the video.
Also, I think you have too many slides. I think what is pertinent/important is the fact that the current Red Cross material is geared towards parents rather than children and this is the void you’re trying to fill. I am also not sure it’s necessary to show precedents. I think your presentation should be a bit more streamlined and focus more on the cool animation that you created.
The animated storyboard is coming along great and the animation is finally beginning to be seen. As stated before, some things of the presentation could be shortened, specifically: The statistics, try to minimize how much you’re pointing out by just doing simple call outs and a single visual; The storyboard of the animation can be shortened to one slide, we will be seeing the visual so there’s no need to thoroughly go in depth through it.
A general rule is 10 slides or less makes a good presentation. I’d also practice what you are going to say so you feel more comfortable with your presentation.
Your animation is turning out well. I would suggest editing your list of precedents to include less “bad” examples and more examples of things you thought were successful and how those models could be adapted for the Red Cross’s mission.
The video looks approachable and kid-friendly, and definitely different from your precedents. I would also suggest that you show more successful kid-friendly PSAs that are out there.
As mentioned the Smokey Bear.
And not the scary ones, as the audience might question the choice of precedents, as there are many out there not succesful. But rather you started to focus on children, hence you should focus on research that is also focused. Not just any video on home fires.
Make sure that narration works well with the existing animation.
That is key to the mood you’re trying to set.